It's two in the morning here and I finally finished it! Been reading literally since this morning (or last morning?) and all I could say is, PLEASE CONTINUE IT I CANT LIVE WITHOUT THEM ANYMORE ;(((
To be completely honest I was a bit skeptical because the cover was quite... random? no offense of course, it was just a perspective of someone who hasn't read the story yet, but when I clicked on the page, I was freaking surprised to find a whole character design for the RO??? All of them too??? Like WOW and I tell myself I'm playing this JUST to test it out whether it's good or not....
But look at me now, almost twenty hours later, typing this review even though I'm dying to have some sleep already.
I really couldn't wait for another update, I'm fr will wait forever for you to update, this is going into one of my most favorite IF's EVER and you'll be one of my fav creators too fr fr! I really enjoyed the game, like really, really, really enjoyed it, so thank you for making such a masterpiece! I literally cried at many scene, like the last game they had or when I saw the option to approach the uncle-nephew pair at the party crossed out, like I cried so bad, I could save them if only I choose different option ;(
I'm playing Omar's route today so I'll play another route and switch up some options so that I get a different path, but that's for when I wake up later, I'm so excited! :> Though, can I ask if there's another intimate encounter like the one with Omar in another RO's path just this far? Or is it only available in Omar's route?
Anyway, I hope wherever you are, you'd always be safe and happy, please keep up the good work, I love em so much! ;)))
Omg, thank you so, so much for this wonderful message!! <3. I am beyond happy to hear that you gave this story a chance, and even more to know that you ended up liking it! Really, I have no words to express my gratitude :’D.
To answer your question, only Ada/Omar has an intimate scene for now. The others, with the exception of Leire/Luca and the mysterious figure, will have their own spicy scenes in the future ;). And as for the cover, no offense taken! To be honest, I usually prefer simple designs, and this one is a bit too flashy for my usual tastes, but it was the only one that convinced me from all the options I came up with, and I’ve grown fond of it with time xD.
I hope you have fun and enjoy the next route you choose, hopefully with less tears! From the bottom of my heart, thank you so much again for the message and for putting a big smile on my face today! <3
Lolol im just saying (only on chp2/3(one of those i forget)) but with how much they seem to be dismissing my MCs honesty about thwir dreams, lol, i have a feeling there will be consequences for this lolol.
Lmao! Yeah, from MC's point of view, something clearly doesn't add up! But in Rayco/Gara and Albert/Lavina's defense, the dream visitor is not what they seem ;).
I have concerns about Omar route, what happened with the Omar route? I am actively pursuing him and choosing every scene with him. My MC relationship status with him is "care," but somehow when my MC chooses the option "I want more than just fun with you, Omar," he rejects us and questions, "Since when?" I was confused about that because my MC is so obvious with her interest in him, but he disregards it easily. I know he has a lot of issues, especially with his past, but still, it hurts. So I just want to clarify: is there any romance route with him or only fling/fwb? If he is only interested in a physical relationship, I will restart to move on to another love interest who wants both.
Don't worry, he is a full RO and you're on the right path. Every RO has its own dynamic, and Ada/Omar's is fwb to lovers. Right now, Ada/Omar doesn't feel anything romantic for the MC, they are just physically attracted to them, and what you choose in chapter 9 determines how they'll behave towards the MC from that point on (whether they keep flirting or try to keep their distance sentimentally speaking to not hurt the MC further), but I assure you that there will come a point where those feelings will inevitably change, and Ada/Omar never shy away from expressing themselves openly. When they start to fall for the MC, they'll say so without a problem.
May all stars and Gods smile upon you, this story shall be blessed with divine might!
I absolutely adore the writing, the characters, the scenes, the careful way every sentence and scene flows with the music and the choices feel so natural.
So many emotions, so much happiness and angst in one sitting.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!! What a great way to start my morning with this lovely message ^^. I am beyond happy to know you're enjoying this story, and also honoured to be receiving these wonderful words! Your support means a lot to me, and I hope the joy this project brings continues throughout the rest of the series.
Thank you very, very much for the comment, I'm very grateful for it ^^. Wishing you a fantastic day ahead, and sending much love your way, kind stranger :D!
Ahhh, I just finished reading chapter 8 and I just can't!! BE SILENT!! It's very interesting and so dramatic!! Q___Q
And all the ROs are just aaaah, everyone is simply unique and interesting in their own way! However, I decided to give my heart to Luca!! :D (although I will definitely read all the other routs later too)
Thank you so much for your work, I will look forward to continuing! And I also have a question: will this IF be released in Steam? I would love to buy it there!! Q___Q
O mg, thank you so, so much for this wonderful message!! I am beyond happy to know you’re enjoying the story! You’ve chosen a good RO, indeed. Leire/Luca’s dynamic is one of my favourites and I can’t wait to show more of them in Act 2, and especially in Act 3, hehe :D.
To answer your question, for now I’m thinking on just using this page, since once you pay (or donate, actually) the amount that’s asked, you’ll have access to download the game in any format and it will be linked to your account. So, for example, you play on PC but for some reason you want to change to mobile for another route. Here, you wouldn’t need to pay for the game again, and I think that’s a pretty good advantage. But in the future? Yes, of course I’d love to release it on Steam and Play Store and Apple Store! These last two I’m not worried about because I have seen that the Monaca platform works pretty well to convert Twine games into mobile apps (and it's something I'll have to do anyway to release it here), but Steam seems a bit more complicated. I don’t know if Monaca would work to convert a HTML file into something that Steam would allow to be released on their platform, and if not, I don’t know of any other tool.
TL;DR, this game will be available for purchase here on itch.io. Maybe on Steam, Apple Store, and Play Store in the future, but it’s not my priority for now unless I discover a tool to make it work on Steam.
Thank you once again for the comment! I hope you have a fantastic day :D
Oh, I hope you will be able to fulfill your plans for a release on different platforms! q_q
In my country, there is no way to pay on this site now, so I buy all the IF (including many of them on Twine and Choice of Games) in Steam, so I hope that in the future you will be able to do it, anyway, good luck with the work again!! UwU
Thanks, I hope so too! And wow, that's a shame, I didn't know it was restricted in some countries :S. I have seen Twine games that have been released on Steam, so if I manage to find a good tutorial it shouldn't be that complicated... I hope, haha! Fingers crossed!
The ROs are all monogamous, so no polyamory there.
There will be some scenes of jealousy in the future that I have planned, both coming from the MC or the ROs depending on the route you're reading. But it will be a very minor thing and will not change the dynamic nor the romance.
And about the love triangle routes, I did think about doing at least one (more specifically Leire/Luca with Rayco/Gara) but I quickly discarded the idea because of how much work it would take. I'd have to create a whole new route just for that, add even more variations, choose scenes between them and how the other feels about it, the different endings, etc.
It's just too much for my first game. There's already enough drama in the story and in each route to add even more lol. I rather focus on each of them individually and let the players experience the romances to the fullest without a third person in the mix.
Wonderful game! i usually dont comment but i just had to.. When the mc is in the blue coyote underground place and gets to choose a person to chat with, i chose luca. and then we get to pick our preferred animal. ofc i choose cat. and then our reasoning for choosing a cat is that THEYRE EASY.? REQUIRE LESS ATTENTION. gorl i am crying like no no no those are all the worst reasons to pick a cat. it just threw me off because it seems like sort of an apathetic reason. no hate or anything especially towards a piece of work that obviously took so much time and love it just sent me into a mini coma of sadness ;; (srsly tho i love luca) .... (and cats....)
Hahahaha no worries! I gotta be honest, I really, really don't like cats >.<. Not that I hate them or anything like that, but I'm very afraid of them, something that makes people who know me laugh because I have one (or more like my brother has and I'm just stuck with them lol). For that scene I asked people who do love cats and those were the responses I got so... yeah xD
I love this story... As I use a screen translator I have to interpret some things, but I still love it a lot... Thank you so much for taking me out of my boredom💕💕💕.
And if you see any errors here... Well, it's because my English is very basic😅.
I am in love with your work !! It's really incredible, your writing is beautiful and made me experience all the emotions. I eagerly await for the next chapters !! ;)
(sorry if i don't express myself well, i don't speak English very well)
could you possibly see if you can add some options to turn down the background music? or mute them in general? i often have a video playing in the background but there's no options to do so sadly enough!
That's because you either don't meet the requirements or you've already picked the option. For example, there's an option in chapter one in the tavern keeper or the doctor's route that, depending on if the MC believes or not in the gods, you can or cannot choose.
Hahaha! I decided to delete that feature because I think it takes away part of the charm of playing interactive novels, but I understand the struggle :') That's why I always save before making any choices in these types of games xD
Aww, I'm very happy to hear that! :D I'm glad you love Luca! Leire/Luca's romance dynamic is one of my favourites and I have a lot of scenes for them in mind that I can't wait to put in the story.
In the LI info it probably would have just been easier to just use they/them pronouns since they could be male or female 💀 and would just be faster than typing "she/he" or "his/her" just unnecessary struggle
omg I LOVE THISS 🥹🥹 I really love the story and characters in this! Hope u have a nice day and I’ll be waiting for the next update!! Tysm for making this
Finished the demo, I just wanna say it's so good! The premise of story and the dynamic between our MC and their LIs are unique. Each LI has some layer of their character and they have their own charm and flaws too so far I love it. Can't wait for more chapter! Thanks for sharing this amazing WIP i hope u have a good day devs keep up the good work ❤
Amazing update, was beyond excited to see there was a new chapter. I’m not sure if it only happened to me, but the relationship meter almost seems to reset at the start of chapter 6. Like it’ll be at Soulmates or Love but will switch to Care as soon as chapter 6 starts, whether you load an old save or just play all the way through. Not sure if this would have any impact on the plot.
The relationship meter is something I have to change once I finish this first act, I am aware. I noticed it was way too easy to get a high relationship with the characters, so I decided to manually change it since it's waaaay too early in the story for the MC and the ROs to consider each other 'soulmates'. The 'love' part depends a lot on the RO since they all have different dynamics. Some will develop feelings faster while others aren't in love with the MC yet or don't even know they feel something for them.
Still, it isn't too important. The plot remains the same, and the MC will be on good terms with every character even with a low relationship. What matters the most is the friendship meter, which decides which character shows up in some scenes to talk to the MC or who will comment about them and the RO in certain situations. But yeah, I have to improve that aspect of the game in the future, and I will. For now, though? It's not something you should worry about, it won't affect the story.
I found a bug and typo while playing chapter 6 and because I dont know whether or not you have a place for people to put bug reports at im just gonna put it here
And for those who have not played chapter 6 beware of spoilers!!!!
Thank you so much for spotting those! They're already fixed :D It's weird I didn't see the second one when testing because it's not exactly subtle lol!
Hmm. Apart from Tumblr I don't have any other places for people to let me know about bugs privately to avoid spoilers, but I guess here is fine if there's a warning like you put if a screenshot reveals too much. It's also fine if you copy and paste just a few paragraphs, I'll know where the typo is in the story ^^
Thank you for fixing them! And uuh I actually found another bug like the second one from chapter 1
Once again spoilers for those who have not played the game!!!
so I chose to work in the tavern with Rayco and I chose to go back to sleep after the nightmare. Also when I chose what Omar/ada's name/pronouns are gonna be I chose Ada and the pronouns are right her/she but her name became Omar after the first scene of hers is it supposed to be like that?
Oops, yeah that change of name was my bad. I changed the variable to check something quickly and completely forgot about it later. That one and the bug with Rayco/Gara's pronouns are fixed now! Unfortunately, you'll have to start over in order to see the correct name. I doubled checked it and there should be no more issues with Ada/Omar's name nor with any of the other ROs. ^^
Hi there! I'm guessing you mean when this project was a visual novel? Unfortunately I had a problem with the program I was using and decided to change the format from a visual novel to a text based novel, which gave me the opportunity to add gender customisable ROs, something I wanted to do before but I couldn't figure out how with the visual novel.
I still plan on doing it, though. Once I finish the first act I'll remake it with Renpy and add it here. The same with the second act (first text, then visual), the third one and so on. Plus it gives me time to improve my drawing skills to make the visual novel more pleasant to the eye, so that's always nice :D
Yay! I was so excited when I saw this had been updated :D oh it's getting so good! I'm dying to know who the renegade and shadow are to Rayco as they keep calling him pretender and also the renegade seems to think we look like someone from his past maybe? Its just so intriguing! I did find two errors at least I think they are since I'm with Rayco, here they are.
The demon is between you and the path to the door, Omar is not here to help you, and you can't fight comfortably in this room, much less if you have to hold the torch up to be able to see.
And here too
“Damn it! Omar-”
Oh back to Rayco, he really didn't want me touching his wounded wing :( I wanted to kiss it all better but he shot me down lol I did melt though when he protected me within them. Great chapter!
Damn, you chose the only route where I made that mistake xD Thank you for telling me! It's already fixed :D
I can't wait to tell more about the renegade and the shadow. Especially the renegade! But it's going to take some time to know who they are and what ties them to Rayco. I've been leaving some hints here and there that will make sense later into the story ;D
And yes, Rayco doesn't let anyone touch his wings... yet. Touching the wings of a god has a very special meaning, even more if someone literally kisses them haha!
Wow this is just terrific! Rayco is so afraid to love me it breaks my heart! Oh man the angst is going to kill me lol Eagerly awaiting future chapters! I did find some minor spelling errors but I didn't bother to take note of them but I did take note of he/she errors and one description error which I'll list here.
When omar meets his father. When the king is talking about the sick. Omar lowers her gaze.
When searching for rayco in the library he's referred to as a redhaired man instead of purple.
When choosing who to visit, in Lucas room I ask if he needs omar to help with his headache "No." She says curtly.
When talking to Albert about his fight with Luca, "Well, now you know what to do when things calm down. And... I think she'll see your point, too."
When visiting Omar after drawing on the sleeping guard, "Don't you think these armors look a little bland?" She asks with a half-smile that you know very well. Another one forms on your face.
Omar escaping from Daira, Daira lets her pass, trying not to show the small smile she tries to suppress, although the slight curve that forms at the corner of her lips gives her away.
When talking to Daira about Omar, "Not good," you reply with a grimace. "She's come home to find everything turned upside down."
Here also : “She's told me something, but I'd like to hear the whole story."
And here: "Did she have any problems with anyone?"
Here too: "On one of her excursions, Omar met a girl from Pio Suave. A commoner.
"the same day of the funeral she picked up a couple of things and ran away.
Please fix when you can :D Your story is amazing and I've had several hours of non stop enjoyable reading. Thank you!!
Thank you so, so much for spotting all those errors! They're all already fixed :D I apologise for that, the editing method I was using made it all very confusing and a lot of these little things always went unnoticed to me. Hopefully, with the new editing plan I have, the mistakes with the ROs pronouns should be reduced massively from now on. Not so much the grammar and spelling mistakes, I'm afraid, since english isn't my mother tongue, but I hope it's not too bad :'D
Oh, Rayco is very afraid to love MC, and even more terrified of being loved back! He needs time -and maybe a punch or two- before he's ready. Until then, he will try to keep MC at arm's length, quite unsuccessfully I have to add, he can't help but to show his affection in one way or another haha!
And thank you so much for the comment! ❤️ I'm glad to know you're enjoying the story and I hope you will continue to do so! :D
Glad to know you like Rayco that much! I hope you have enough patience to play his route, though, because you're going to need it haha! But I promise it will be worth it ^^
Ah, Enid, our little furball... she is adorable and she knows it! xD
Thank you very much for this amazing comment! ❤️ I'm very happy to know you're enjoying this story. I hope you have a great day as well :D
some of the coding for the gender and names that you can choose for the characters is wrong and when they mention a choice you chose or appearance is also bugged
I apologise for that, I try to get them all right but I always miss some. I need to find a way to edit the chapters better because the way I do it now gets very confusing and some things like this always slips haha. I'll check it soon and fix as many of those errors as I can!
Please don't apologize; this stuff happens. Even though I don't know how to code, I find it to be quite interesting and I greatly admire those who can do it :). You are plenty good at this.
Thank you for being so understanding! ❤️ Still, I know it can be pretty frustrating to get the ROs pronouns wrong, so I'll always appreciate people telling me when it happens and try to fix it quickly. I've already fixed quite a few in chapter 4 and 5, just let me know if you ever encounter more :D
Thank you so much! This truly means a lot ❤️ I'm very happy you already like Rayco! He was the first OC I created and he's very special to me 😄 I hope you keep enjoying the story and Rayco's romance!
You are correct. It was a visual novel, but unfortunately, I encountered a problem with the program I used that I tried to solve for a long time and it only ended up stressing me out, so I decided to change the format until the story is finished, which meant getting rid of every visual aspect.
The good thing about this is that it gave me the freedom to add a few new things, like better customisation and the option to choose the ROs gender.
I still want to make it a visual novel, but I'm afraid that will have to wait for the future, once the first draft is done at least.
So not cancelled, really. More like delayed. I'm very sorry for the confusion. 😔
Thank you for reporting those errors! They were both caused by typing the variables wrong but it should be fixed now. Perhaps you'll have to replay the scene where you choose the doctor's gender, sorry for the inconvenience.
there are a few errors when mentioning the name of a few npcs at certain scenes and when you try to select the sword it appears that you chose the magic grimoire/magic book when you hadn't
I'm sorry, this update is taking way longer than I expected. Mainly because I had a problem with the backgrounds I was using, and it was stressing me out so much I decided to change the entire format. I was using Renpy, now I'm using Twine, getting rid of all the visual aspects, which makes it easier and less stressful for me because I don't have to worry about sprites and backgrounds and I can focus on the story only. I will change it back to a visual novel once I'm finished with the first draft, and hopefully I'll be better at drawing backgrounds enough to be able to make them myself and not rely on anyone else.
But to compensate the removal of the visual part I'm currently writing a prologue to show how MC met the rest of the group, and I'm making the ROs gender customisable -which was something I wanted to do before the release but decided against it because of all the work I'd had to do with the sprites and CGs-, and I'm also adding a codex to help the player understand the world and the lore a bit better, and to put all the important information about characters, places and valuable items.
So TL;DR, I've removed all the visual aspects of the story and started from scratch on a new format. Unfortunately I don't know when I'll be able to release the next update, I'm about half way through the writing but I still have some things to work on, so probably a month or two? Although I can promise that after this update the next ones will be much quicker .
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It's two in the morning here and I finally finished it! Been reading literally since this morning (or last morning?) and all I could say is, PLEASE CONTINUE IT I CANT LIVE WITHOUT THEM ANYMORE ;(((
To be completely honest I was a bit skeptical because the cover was quite... random? no offense of course, it was just a perspective of someone who hasn't read the story yet, but when I clicked on the page, I was freaking surprised to find a whole character design for the RO??? All of them too??? Like WOW and I tell myself I'm playing this JUST to test it out whether it's good or not....
But look at me now, almost twenty hours later, typing this review even though I'm dying to have some sleep already.
I really couldn't wait for another update, I'm fr will wait forever for you to update, this is going into one of my most favorite IF's EVER and you'll be one of my fav creators too fr fr! I really enjoyed the game, like really, really, really enjoyed it, so thank you for making such a masterpiece! I literally cried at many scene, like the last game they had or when I saw the option to approach the uncle-nephew pair at the party crossed out, like I cried so bad, I could save them if only I choose different option ;(
I'm playing Omar's route today so I'll play another route and switch up some options so that I get a different path, but that's for when I wake up later, I'm so excited! :> Though, can I ask if there's another intimate encounter like the one with Omar in another RO's path just this far? Or is it only available in Omar's route?
Anyway, I hope wherever you are, you'd always be safe and happy, please keep up the good work, I love em so much! ;)))
Omg, thank you so, so much for this wonderful message!! <3. I am beyond happy to hear that you gave this story a chance, and even more to know that you ended up liking it! Really, I have no words to express my gratitude :’D.
To answer your question, only Ada/Omar has an intimate scene for now. The others, with the exception of Leire/Luca and the mysterious figure, will have their own spicy scenes in the future ;). And as for the cover, no offense taken! To be honest, I usually prefer simple designs, and this one is a bit too flashy for my usual tastes, but it was the only one that convinced me from all the options I came up with, and I’ve grown fond of it with time xD.
I hope you have fun and enjoy the next route you choose, hopefully with less tears! From the bottom of my heart, thank you so much again for the message and for putting a big smile on my face today! <3
Lolol im just saying (only on chp2/3(one of those i forget)) but with how much they seem to be dismissing my MCs honesty about thwir dreams, lol, i have a feeling there will be consequences for this lolol.
Lmao! Yeah, from MC's point of view, something clearly doesn't add up! But in Rayco/Gara and Albert/Lavina's defense, the dream visitor is not what they seem ;).
*Spoiler*
I have concerns about Omar route, what happened with the Omar route? I am actively pursuing him and choosing every scene with him. My MC relationship status with him is "care," but somehow when my MC chooses the option "I want more than just fun with you, Omar," he rejects us and questions, "Since when?" I was confused about that because my MC is so obvious with her interest in him, but he disregards it easily. I know he has a lot of issues, especially with his past, but still, it hurts. So I just want to clarify: is there any romance route with him or only fling/fwb? If he is only interested in a physical relationship, I will restart to move on to another love interest who wants both.
Don't worry, he is a full RO and you're on the right path. Every RO has its own dynamic, and Ada/Omar's is fwb to lovers. Right now, Ada/Omar doesn't feel anything romantic for the MC, they are just physically attracted to them, and what you choose in chapter 9 determines how they'll behave towards the MC from that point on (whether they keep flirting or try to keep their distance sentimentally speaking to not hurt the MC further), but I assure you that there will come a point where those feelings will inevitably change, and Ada/Omar never shy away from expressing themselves openly. When they start to fall for the MC, they'll say so without a problem.
Is it the same case with Rayco? I'm having a bit of trouble increasing his as well
The dynamic, you mean? With Rayco/Gara is very different, something like forbidden love. In chapter 9 they talk about it.
So no intimate scenes? Just making sure i didnt !miss n e scenes
Not yet, but they'll come with time. Don't worry, you won't miss a single scene of the romance route!
Wrong pronoun
Thanks for reporting it! These errors have already been fixed. Have a great day! <3
Thank you so much for spotting this and letting me know! It has already been fixed ^^ I hope you keep enjoying this game, have a great day! <3
Woohoo awesome! You have a great day as well.
Love you, love you, love you!
May all stars and Gods smile upon you, this story shall be blessed with divine might!
I absolutely adore the writing, the characters, the scenes, the careful way every sentence and scene flows with the music and the choices feel so natural.
So many emotions, so much happiness and angst in one sitting.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!! What a great way to start my morning with this lovely message ^^. I am beyond happy to know you're enjoying this story, and also honoured to be receiving these wonderful words! Your support means a lot to me, and I hope the joy this project brings continues throughout the rest of the series.
Thank you very, very much for the comment, I'm very grateful for it ^^. Wishing you a fantastic day ahead, and sending much love your way, kind stranger :D!
Ahhh, I just finished reading chapter 8 and I just can't!! BE SILENT!! It's very interesting and so dramatic!! Q___Q
And all the ROs are just aaaah, everyone is simply unique and interesting in their own way! However, I decided to give my heart to Luca!! :D
(although I will definitely read all the other routs later too)Thank you so much for your work, I will look forward to continuing! And I also have a question: will this IF be released in Steam? I would love to buy it there!! Q___Q
Thanks again!!
O mg, thank you so, so much for this wonderful message!! I am beyond happy to know you’re enjoying the story! You’ve chosen a good RO, indeed. Leire/Luca’s dynamic is one of my favourites and I can’t wait to show more of them in Act 2, and especially in Act 3, hehe :D.
To answer your question, for now I’m thinking on just using this page, since once you pay (or donate, actually) the amount that’s asked, you’ll have access to download the game in any format and it will be linked to your account. So, for example, you play on PC but for some reason you want to change to mobile for another route. Here, you wouldn’t need to pay for the game again, and I think that’s a pretty good advantage. But in the future? Yes, of course I’d love to release it on Steam and Play Store and Apple Store! These last two I’m not worried about because I have seen that the Monaca platform works pretty well to convert Twine games into mobile apps (and it's something I'll have to do anyway to release it here), but Steam seems a bit more complicated. I don’t know if Monaca would work to convert a HTML file into something that Steam would allow to be released on their platform, and if not, I don’t know of any other tool.
TL;DR, this game will be available for purchase here on itch.io. Maybe on Steam, Apple Store, and Play Store in the future, but it’s not my priority for now unless I discover a tool to make it work on Steam.
Thank you once again for the comment! I hope you have a fantastic day :D
Oh, I hope you will be able to fulfill your plans for a release on different platforms! q_q
In my country, there is no way to pay on this site now, so I buy all the IF (including many of them on Twine and Choice of Games) in Steam, so I hope that in the future you will be able to do it, anyway, good luck with the work again!! UwU
Thanks, I hope so too! And wow, that's a shame, I didn't know it was restricted in some countries :S. I have seen Twine games that have been released on Steam, so if I manage to find a good tutorial it shouldn't be that complicated... I hope, haha! Fingers crossed!
Chapter 8 in one word was outstanding. I just loved the progression and I honestly I am obsessed with all of the characters 💞💞
Thank you so, so much!! :') It was a challenging one to write, so I'm very happy to know you like it! Thanks for the comment! <3
oml the art of rayco and gara are just...
Hopefully that's the good kind of speechless haha!
it is😫
Are there love triangles or polyamory or jealousy?
The ROs are all monogamous, so no polyamory there.
There will be some scenes of jealousy in the future that I have planned, both coming from the MC or the ROs depending on the route you're reading. But it will be a very minor thing and will not change the dynamic nor the romance.
And about the love triangle routes, I did think about doing at least one (more specifically Leire/Luca with Rayco/Gara) but I quickly discarded the idea because of how much work it would take. I'd have to create a whole new route just for that, add even more variations, choose scenes between them and how the other feels about it, the different endings, etc. It's just too much for my first game. There's already enough drama in the story and in each route to add even more lol. I rather focus on each of them individually and let the players experience the romances to the fullest without a third person in the mix.
Wonderful game! i usually dont comment but i just had to.. When the mc is in the blue coyote underground place and gets to choose a person to chat with, i chose luca. and then we get to pick our preferred animal. ofc i choose cat. and then our reasoning for choosing a cat is that THEYRE EASY.? REQUIRE LESS ATTENTION. gorl i am crying like no no no those are all the worst reasons to pick a cat. it just threw me off because it seems like sort of an apathetic reason. no hate or anything especially towards a piece of work that obviously took so much time and love it just sent me into a mini coma of sadness ;; (srsly tho i love luca) .... (and cats....)
Hahahaha no worries! I gotta be honest, I really, really don't like cats >.<. Not that I hate them or anything like that, but I'm very afraid of them, something that makes people who know me laugh because I have one (or more like my brother has and I'm just stuck with them lol). For that scene I asked people who do love cats and those were the responses I got so... yeah xD
I love this story... As I use a screen translator I have to interpret some things, but I still love it a lot... Thank you so much for taking me out of my boredom💕💕💕.
And if you see any errors here... Well, it's because my English is very basic😅.Thank you so much for this lovely comment! It truly makes me very happy to know you love this story, and I hope you continue to enjoy it :D!
is the </div> thingy a bug?
It is indeed a bug. Thank you for spotting it! It'll be fixed in the next update :)
I am in love with your work !! It's really incredible, your writing is beautiful and made me experience all the emotions. I eagerly await for the next chapters !! ;)
(sorry if i don't express myself well, i don't speak English very well)
Thank you so much! It makes me happy to know I managed to get all those emotions across through my writing :D
OMG I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!! I'm so glad I was able to find this IF!
Thank you so much! It means the world to me :D I hope you continue to enjoy it <3
could you possibly see if you can add some options to turn down the background music? or mute them in general? i often have a video playing in the background but there's no options to do so sadly enough!
Of course! This is something I've wanted to add for a while but I never get it to work properly. I'll see if I can add it for the next update!
Why are some of the options crossed out? Like, the one I want to do isn't available
That's because you either don't meet the requirements or you've already picked the option. For example, there's an option in chapter one in the tavern keeper or the doctor's route that, depending on if the MC believes or not in the gods, you can or cannot choose.
I would have loved a back option- because how much I loved to not mess my choices ! ;-;
Hahaha! I decided to delete that feature because I think it takes away part of the charm of playing interactive novels, but I understand the struggle :') That's why I always save before making any choices in these types of games xD
That's what I was doing but I did a mistake and erased my save ! ;-;
Oh, no! D: That's very unfortunate. It has happened to me too quite a few times and it's such a frustrating moment :(
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS!!!! Honestly best by far, personally love Luca
Aww, I'm very happy to hear that! :D I'm glad you love Luca! Leire/Luca's romance dynamic is one of my favourites and I have a lot of scenes for them in mind that I can't wait to put in the story.
Thank you so much for the comment! <3
In the LI info it probably would have just been easier to just use they/them pronouns since they could be male or female 💀 and would just be faster than typing "she/he" or "his/her" just unnecessary struggle
Yeah, you're probably right haha! But I don't mind, it doesn't bother me to type it like that so it's fine :D
omg I LOVE THISS 🥹🥹 I really love the story and characters in this! Hope u have a nice day and I’ll be waiting for the next update!! Tysm for making this
Thank you so much for this sweet message! <3 I'm glad to know you're enjoying the story so far. I hope you have a nice day too! :D
Finished the demo, I just wanna say it's so good! The premise of story and the dynamic between our MC and their LIs are unique. Each LI has some layer of their character and they have their own charm and flaws too so far I love it. Can't wait for more chapter! Thanks for sharing this amazing WIP i hope u have a good day devs keep up the good work ❤
Thank you so much for the comment and for taking the time to check this story out! I hope you enjoy the rest of it :D
AAAA I LOVE THIS !!! 💖💖
I'M REALLY INLOVE WITH RAYCO EVEN THOUGH HE BREAKS MY HEART :'((
These comments make so happy, thank you!! :D You need a bit of patience with Rayco but I promise it will be worth it, you won't regret it! <3
DON'T WORRYYY!! I'LL BE LOOKING FORWARD TO IT >:D
Amazing update, was beyond excited to see there was a new chapter. I’m not sure if it only happened to me, but the relationship meter almost seems to reset at the start of chapter 6. Like it’ll be at Soulmates or Love but will switch to Care as soon as chapter 6 starts, whether you load an old save or just play all the way through. Not sure if this would have any impact on the plot.
Hey there! Glad to know you liked it! :D
The relationship meter is something I have to change once I finish this first act, I am aware. I noticed it was way too easy to get a high relationship with the characters, so I decided to manually change it since it's waaaay too early in the story for the MC and the ROs to consider each other 'soulmates'. The 'love' part depends a lot on the RO since they all have different dynamics. Some will develop feelings faster while others aren't in love with the MC yet or don't even know they feel something for them.
Still, it isn't too important. The plot remains the same, and the MC will be on good terms with every character even with a low relationship. What matters the most is the friendship meter, which decides which character shows up in some scenes to talk to the MC or who will comment about them and the RO in certain situations. But yeah, I have to improve that aspect of the game in the future, and I will. For now, though? It's not something you should worry about, it won't affect the story.
Thank you for the comment! :D
That makes sense! Thanks so much for clearing that up. Super excited for more!
👀 wow... That was really bizarre... I feel like this "guy" is going to do a lot of things with the protagonist... And thanks for the update🩵💙
Yeah, he is bored and he's chosen MC as his new object of entertainment, unfortunately for them. :#
You're most welcome, and thank you for taking the time to read it! :D
I found a bug and typo while playing chapter 6 and because I dont know whether or not you have a place for people to put bug reports at im just gonna put it here
And for those who have not played chapter 6 beware of spoilers!!!!
Thank you so much for spotting those! They're already fixed :D It's weird I didn't see the second one when testing because it's not exactly subtle lol!
Hmm. Apart from Tumblr I don't have any other places for people to let me know about bugs privately to avoid spoilers, but I guess here is fine if there's a warning like you put if a screenshot reveals too much. It's also fine if you copy and paste just a few paragraphs, I'll know where the typo is in the story ^^
Thank you for fixing them! And uuh I actually found another bug like the second one from chapter 1
Once again spoilers for those who have not played the game!!!
so I chose to work in the tavern with Rayco and I chose to go back to sleep after the nightmare. Also when I chose what Omar/ada's name/pronouns are gonna be I chose Ada and the pronouns are right her/she but her name became Omar after the first scene of hers is it supposed to be like that?
Oops, yeah that change of name was my bad. I changed the variable to check something quickly and completely forgot about it later. That one and the bug with Rayco/Gara's pronouns are fixed now! Unfortunately, you'll have to start over in order to see the correct name. I doubled checked it and there should be no more issues with Ada/Omar's name nor with any of the other ROs. ^^
No more download link? T_____T
Hi there! I'm guessing you mean when this project was a visual novel? Unfortunately I had a problem with the program I was using and decided to change the format from a visual novel to a text based novel, which gave me the opportunity to add gender customisable ROs, something I wanted to do before but I couldn't figure out how with the visual novel.
I still plan on doing it, though. Once I finish the first act I'll remake it with Renpy and add it here. The same with the second act (first text, then visual), the third one and so on. Plus it gives me time to improve my drawing skills to make the visual novel more pleasant to the eye, so that's always nice :D
Ah "^^_ as sad as that is for me, it makes sense, but it's cool to hear that xou've added gender pronouns UwU
Thank xou for responding and for all of the effort xou're putting into this :p I can't wait to see all that xou've done! n_n/
Thank you for the comment and for taking the time to check out this story! I hope you have a good day! :D
Yay! I was so excited when I saw this had been updated :D oh it's getting so good! I'm dying to know who the renegade and shadow are to Rayco as they keep calling him pretender and also the renegade seems to think we look like someone from his past maybe? Its just so intriguing! I did find two errors at least I think they are since I'm with Rayco, here they are.
The demon is between you and the path to the door, Omar is not here to help you, and you can't fight comfortably in this room, much less if you have to hold the torch up to be able to see.
And here too
“Damn it! Omar-”
Oh back to Rayco, he really didn't want me touching his wounded wing :( I wanted to kiss it all better but he shot me down lol I did melt though when he protected me within them. Great chapter!
Damn, you chose the only route where I made that mistake xD Thank you for telling me! It's already fixed :D
I can't wait to tell more about the renegade and the shadow. Especially the renegade! But it's going to take some time to know who they are and what ties them to Rayco. I've been leaving some hints here and there that will make sense later into the story ;D
And yes, Rayco doesn't let anyone touch his wings... yet. Touching the wings of a god has a very special meaning, even more if someone literally kisses them haha!
Oh I do love a good mystery! I will definitely continue reading :D
Wow this is just terrific! Rayco is so afraid to love me it breaks my heart! Oh man the angst is going to kill me lol Eagerly awaiting future chapters! I did find some minor spelling errors but I didn't bother to take note of them but I did take note of he/she errors and one description error which I'll list here.
When omar meets his father. When the king is talking about the sick. Omar lowers her gaze.
When searching for rayco in the library he's referred to as a redhaired man instead of purple.
When choosing who to visit, in Lucas room I ask if he needs omar to help with his headache "No." She says curtly.
When talking to Albert about his fight with Luca, "Well, now you know what to do when things calm down. And... I think she'll see your point, too."
When visiting Omar after drawing on the sleeping guard, "Don't you think these armors look a little bland?" She asks with a half-smile that you know very well. Another one forms on your face.
Omar escaping from Daira, Daira lets her pass, trying not to show the small smile she tries to suppress, although the slight curve that forms at the corner of her lips gives her away.
When talking to Daira about Omar, "Not good," you reply with a grimace. "She's come home to find everything turned upside down."
Here also : “She's told me something, but I'd like to hear the whole story."
And here: "Did she have any problems with anyone?"
Here too: "On one of her excursions, Omar met a girl from Pio Suave. A commoner.
"the same day of the funeral she picked up a couple of things and ran away.
Please fix when you can :D Your story is amazing and I've had several hours of non stop enjoyable reading. Thank you!!
Thank you so, so much for spotting all those errors! They're all already fixed :D I apologise for that, the editing method I was using made it all very confusing and a lot of these little things always went unnoticed to me. Hopefully, with the new editing plan I have, the mistakes with the ROs pronouns should be reduced massively from now on. Not so much the grammar and spelling mistakes, I'm afraid, since english isn't my mother tongue, but I hope it's not too bad :'D
Oh, Rayco is very afraid to love MC, and even more terrified of being loved back! He needs time -and maybe a punch or two- before he's ready. Until then, he will try to keep MC at arm's length, quite unsuccessfully I have to add, he can't help but to show his affection in one way or another haha!
And thank you so much for the comment! ❤️ I'm glad to know you're enjoying the story and I hope you will continue to do so! :D
Oh good! His type of romance is my absolute favorite! I'm glad to hear that he will be unsuccessful :D
This is such an amazing IF!
I really enjoyed the latest update ✨
Rayco has my complete heart !! 🫡💖and the arm wrestling scene was intense 🤧..need more... We need to talk about how ✨ adorable ✨ Enid is 😭.
I was overjoyed when I saw the ROs Povs...like who doesn't enjoy them...
Thank you and I hope you have a wonderful day ahead 💖
Glad to know you like Rayco that much! I hope you have enough patience to play his route, though, because you're going to need it haha! But I promise it will be worth it ^^
Ah, Enid, our little furball... she is adorable and she knows it! xD
Thank you very much for this amazing comment! ❤️ I'm very happy to know you're enjoying this story. I hope you have a great day as well :D
I'm more than willing to reserve patience for him, and I do believe that everything will be worthwhile in the end with Rayco 🤧✨
Ty for creating this masterpiece ❤️
It looks very interesting, ill definitely read it, I'm surprised I only found out about it now, haha.
Well, I'm glad you did haha! I hope you enjoy it and thank you for taking the time to check it out! :D
It's interesting and good so far! Glad I've found it.
This is such a lovely and well-written story! Can't wait for more.
I'm so happy to hear that! I hope you keep enjoying it until the end. Thank you very much!
I noticed a few errors
some of the coding for the gender and names that you can choose for the characters is wrong and when they mention a choice you chose or appearance is also bugged
Could you tell me in which scenes does it happen, please?
in most of the end parts and a few at the beginning, sorry I don’t remember them all
Alright, thank you! Sorry for the inconvenience, I'm still very bad at coding but I'll try to fix all the errors as soon as I can 🙏
it’s alright and I await to read more of the story
also you could add a bit more references to the appearance choices you made for your character, especially with the white hair and heterochromia eyes
Im also facing the same issue with the RO pronouns..
I apologise for that, I try to get them all right but I always miss some. I need to find a way to edit the chapters better because the way I do it now gets very confusing and some things like this always slips haha. I'll check it soon and fix as many of those errors as I can!
Please don't apologize; this stuff happens. Even though I don't know how to code, I find it to be quite interesting and I greatly admire those who can do it :). You are plenty good at this.
Thank you for being so understanding! ❤️ Still, I know it can be pretty frustrating to get the ROs pronouns wrong, so I'll always appreciate people telling me when it happens and try to fix it quickly. I've already fixed quite a few in chapter 4 and 5, just let me know if you ever encounter more :D
It's my pleasure 😄... I'll let you know if I encounter any more of those errors.
This is now my top fav and Roayco already has my heart! <3
Thank you so much! This truly means a lot ❤️ I'm very happy you already like Rayco! He was the first OC I created and he's very special to me 😄 I hope you keep enjoying the story and Rayco's romance!
I Love it <3
I'm glad to know! Thank you so much ❤️
Slightly confused? Wasn't this a Visual Novel or was that cancelled?
You are correct. It was a visual novel, but unfortunately, I encountered a problem with the program I used that I tried to solve for a long time and it only ended up stressing me out, so I decided to change the format until the story is finished, which meant getting rid of every visual aspect.
The good thing about this is that it gave me the freedom to add a few new things, like better customisation and the option to choose the ROs gender.
I still want to make it a visual novel, but I'm afraid that will have to wait for the future, once the first draft is done at least.
So not cancelled, really. More like delayed. I'm very sorry for the confusion. 😔Ah I see ^^ well I personally don't mind the IF version! Keep up the fantastic work n take regular breaks!
Thank you, dude! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!
it looks like this on omar scene: You ask horrified, and when the $AOman_woman
Thank you for reporting those errors! They were both caused by typing the variables wrong but it should be fixed now. Perhaps you'll have to replay the scene where you choose the doctor's gender, sorry for the inconvenience.
there are a few errors when mentioning the name of a few npcs at certain scenes and when you try to select the sword it appears that you chose the magic grimoire/magic book when you hadn't
I keep getting this error.
[code]
While running game code:
File "game/core/story/act1/chapter1/leire_scene_1.rpy", line 318, in <module>
NameError: name 'mc_belief' is not defined
-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------
Full traceback:
File "core/story/act1/chapter1/leire_scene_1.rpyc", line 317, in script
File "renpy/ast.py", line 1688, in execute
File "renpy/exports.py", line 1026, in menu
File "renpy/python.py", line 2276, in py_eval
File "renpy/python.py", line 2269, in py_eval_bytecode
File "game/core/story/act1/chapter1/leire_scene_1.rpy", line 318, in <module>
NameError: name 'mc_belief' is not defined
[/code]
Thank you so much for telling me! It will be fixed in a few weeks when I release the next update
Any updates on the next release?
I'm sorry, this update is taking way longer than I expected. Mainly because I had a problem with the backgrounds I was using, and it was stressing me out so much I decided to change the entire format. I was using Renpy, now I'm using Twine, getting rid of all the visual aspects, which makes it easier and less stressful for me because I don't have to worry about sprites and backgrounds and I can focus on the story only. I will change it back to a visual novel once I'm finished with the first draft, and hopefully I'll be better at drawing backgrounds enough to be able to make them myself and not rely on anyone else.
But to compensate the removal of the visual part I'm currently writing a prologue to show how MC met the rest of the group, and I'm making the ROs gender customisable -which was something I wanted to do before the release but decided against it because of all the work I'd had to do with the sprites and CGs-, and I'm also adding a codex to help the player understand the world and the lore a bit better, and to put all the important information about characters, places and valuable items.
So TL;DR, I've removed all the visual aspects of the story and started from scratch on a new format. Unfortunately I don't know when I'll be able to release the next update, I'm about half way through the writing but I still have some things to work on, so probably a month or two? Although I can promise that after this update the next ones will be much quicker .